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Commerce Emperor: Prologue

🕑 Added 2023-04-18 08:35:27 +0000 UTC
Commerce Emperor: Prologue

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msng

Some suggestions: Should “We went all the way back from the orphanage and we had far been more than friends once.” be: “We went all the way back from the orphanage and we had been far more than friends once.” Should ““I confirm that Baroness Viridis and the Count de Malatesta are indeed having an affair,” I said.” be: ““I can confirm that Baroness Viridis and the Count de Malatesta are indeed having an affair,” I said.” Should “The baroness wouldn’t not be the first noblewoman to have an accident,” be: “The baroness wouldn’t be the first noblewoman to have an accident,” Should “Archfrost is a state of civil war with a rebel province and facing invasions from the north,” be: “Archfrost is in a state of civil war with a rebel province and facing invasions from the north,”

msng

Like how it went!

Harrison Russell

Noooooo read that way too quickly T.T I really enjoyed this chapter. Cant wait to see the other stories pilots.

Alex Lindsay

Wow, this is way better than I thought it would be! I should have had more faith! Your stories always seem exceptional. I would change my vote but now I want to read the other pilots as well :)

Django

I voted for this since the initial synopsis gave me Stormlight Archives vibes. Really like this, hope it wins.

Void Herald

Of course, but the winner will take priority over the others obviously :)

Void Herald

Glad it changed your mind :)

Void Herald

Thank you kindly :)

Tony

Was not initially interested based on the title, but that was fantastic. Excellent work wordsmith.

Doctor Zero

That was instantly awesome. Well done.

Kyle Donmoyer

Damn, this is so good. I hope whatever story wins the others still get their chance when the time is right.

Void Herald

Not entirely sure yet, but it's probably going to be one long chapter for sure, more per week from the story or others if I can make it.

mhaj58

Very nice Pilot, have you decided on your new writing methodology?


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