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Djinn Webtoon Episode 3
🕑 Added 2023-08-24 08:21:17 +0000 UTCHi guys, as promised earlier this week, here's a third episode of the Djinn webtoon (developed in cooperation with Gharbi Zouhayer)! Hope it'll entertain you until the new B&F chapter this Saturday!
As before since this is a work in progress (this episode contains a few visual errors in fact which should be corrected swiftly) any feedback is appreciated.
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Comments
Void Herald
Duly noted; the idea was for it to be a jab (barking implies the Moon Lord sees the lesser djinn as little more than a dog) but can always rewrite the metaphor better ;)
PalmTrees
"Candle barking at an ocean" I can see where you're going with the metaphor. The futility of the the fire djinn (candle) trying to defeat the water djinn(ocean), but barking seems a bit off. Candles don't bark. Barking makes me think of a dog. So it's a bit of a mixed metaphor. You'd want an fire related action instead of barking. Maybe something like a candle trying to boil away an ocean.
AlthePal
I’m really digging the art, great stuff. Also, i love that they were able to show a shocked pikachu face on the skull
