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Mage Steel bk. 2 Ch. 4

🕑 Added 2025-06-23 20:37:44 +0000 UTC

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Jordan A

“The man’s dark eyes were intense as he looked at Kon and Diur, hardly moving his head as he looked the two of them over.” “He was staring into Kon’s eyes the entire time he spoke. Kon felt bare underneath the man’s dark eyes, the intensity of them stripping away his defenses as the man seemed to loom larger and larger until the Knight took up his entire view.” The dialogue above is a little redundant as it essentially says the same thing and is stated pretty close to each other in this chapter (there are only two paragraphs in between these comments). Maybe consolidate them or adjust them so the message conveyed doesn’t seem so similar? Just a thought

Jordan A

Knight Jurgen words directly for the Order of the Dragon. words -> speaks?

Dominick Ruiz

I'll double check in the morning but I could have missed clicking on it.glaf you enjoyed it!

Gingiberry

loving the series, I literally binged the whole thing up to this point over the last 48 hours. sidenote: is this chapter not in the collection? ended up having to search for this chapter cuz I noticed the collection list skipped to 5 from 3

Lucien Jay

So excited to read how he performs on these tests

Mr. Iron

No cheating the DS of labor Kon.

Austin

Thanks!

Steven

Thanks for the chapter!


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