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Mage Steel Bk. 2 Ch. 10

🕑 Added 2025-07-03 16:01:06 +0000 UTC

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Jordan A

“Anyways they were saying stuff about me being a dirty barbarian, that I was courting death, to bow to them and beg forgiveness, all the traditional stuff.” The ‘, all the traditional stuff’ makes this a run-on sentence I believe. Maybe change it to the following: “Anyways, they were saying stuff about me being a dirty barbarian, that I was courting death, to bow to them and beg forgiveness. You know, all the traditional stuff.

Jordan A

Benny’s only just been introduced into the story, but man I love him. Great addition to the story. Love his personality. Every story needs an old man who’s competent and a smartass in it. That’s what I want to be some day haha.


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