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Godslayer Lysette: Chapter 213

🕑 Added 2024-09-20 16:38:50 +0000 UTC

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Bielna

Finally get the context for that line at the beginning, which was so confusing when read as a teaser ! No regrets, 30 chapters ago I wouldn't have guessed the correct context no matter how lucky my guesses could be. Serrena's parents remind me a bit of Mirae's grandmother. Loving, but not really understanding, and it makes sense that Serrena isn't super close to her family. They're also very protective, which is funny because while Serrena might want not to fight alone, she wouldn't need to be protected. Heck, even when she gave her instructions to Rayleigh, she didn't use the word protection, instead ordering to "defend with all the strength at her disposal". It's subtle but I find the difference between wanting to protect someone, and choosing to use your strength to defend them, to be fitting for Serrena's Ambition and her approach to leadership. Also, for her suggestion to her mother, I'm not gonna lie, I'd be curious to see what Serrena would be like as a big sister. =D

Ria Corvidiva

agreed, removed 'off'.

Ria Corvidiva

First instance deleted.

Ria Corvidiva

'from my future brother or sister...' is how I will change that.

Jessica

"whatever it is she sets her mind off to" -> "sets her mind to"

Jessica

"I’ve known something there was something" maybe a something too much?

Jessica

"from whoever my brother or sister" maybe a comma missing. It reads odd without.

Ria Corvidiva

sorry if any Advance Patrons caught this one early - it was briefly set to both paid tiers for a couple minutes!


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