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93 - The True Windbreaker

🕑 Added 2025-04-11 20:00:12 +0000 UTC

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Alex Rahr

Typos & similar Lexie, she felt like Lexie felt like (Or there might be some words missing here but I'm not sure which.) The card signaled her fill in The card signalled her to fill in (Extra l in signalled, add 'to' between 'her' and 'fill'.) who has barely just grasped who has just barely grasped Card created in alien planet Card created on alien planet (Unless 'planet' is a mistranslation.) refuse to buy to refuse to buy the wondering at the cool resting wondering at the cool stone resting (Or something else in place of 'stone' , gem or sensation or something, but there definitely seems to be a missing noun there.)

PrettyPinkCupcake

Suggestion: “I went through a lot of…trouble bringing you back when your soul tried to leave your body that last time," he said. "It would be immensely irritating to have to do it again.” >>> “I went through a lot of… trouble …bringing you back when your soul tried to leave your body that last time," he said. "It would be immensely irritating to have to do it again.” (Add ellipsis)


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