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117 - Lexie Vs The Dungeon Part 2

🕑 Added 2025-05-06 00:00:01 +0000 UTC

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Alex Rahr

Typos and suggestions leading down all the paths. (maybe) heading down all the paths. It was more like a machine that had been programmed to give a certain result and was doing so quickly but not quickly enough now that it had been overworked and overheated. (I'd add some punctuation or maybe break the sentence in two; YMMV.) Lucy’s Hero Log was marked to unavailable Lucy’s Hero Log was marked as unavailable closed his eyes and breath. (maybe replace 'breath' with 'mouth', or maybe make it 'held his breath.', 'breathed in.' or 'breathed out.') She was saved fire erupted She was saved when fire erupted (Probably worth deciding on the pronouns you're using for the troll; he/his or it/its. Mixing them is confusing to me at least.) which they were going in the opposite direction. which they were going in the opposite direction to. several people through the win several people through the window. The other swept his club through and knocking (either) The other swept his club through and knocked (or) The other swept his club through knocking She shot a zap of light to dispel the troll. (To what now? Dispel doesn't make sense in this context.)

PrettyPinkCupcake

If she could trick him into running into one of the buildings perhaps one of them might know him out. >>> If she could trick him into running into one of the buildings perhaps one of them might knock him out.


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