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Book 5 Chapter 20 - The Lady of the Arc (Draft)

🕑 Added 2023-06-30 14:55:07 +0000 UTC

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Michelle Kathleen Hodgson

Welcome back and I'm happy to hear all suggestions! > would the words "Resilience" better fit the Sulin rather than "durability"; and "Fervor" or "Zeal" fit the Arvas rather than "passion"? Passion and resilience were just placeholder names for the sake of the draft so I'm not especially attached to them, your suggestions are great though, I really love 'Zeal' in particular, so that's defo getting switched in!

Kriss Pang

I've been away for a bit but wow, what a chapter to come back to! The first meeting recorded in the books with the Rajava, and already confrontation started. It feels like it's going to be an action packed and exciting arc! If I may make a suggestion - when referring to each of the species characteristics, would the words "Resilience" better fit the Sulin rather than "durability"; and "Fervor" or "Zeal" fit the Arvas rather than "passion"? I feel these new words seem to better reflect the personalities of what we know from the examples of Rynard and Nako. Rynard is not just physically tough but determined and resolute; and Arvas society seems to revere its rulers with duty and devotion, rather than individual passions. I would understand if the original word choice serves some other purpose though! And I think I quite like how the Zenthi are described as this wise race of understanding and wisdom, that really encapsulates what we know about Xant and his approach to the events of Transcripts.

ZCochraine!%

Beau should ask the “If Im a Liar, is this statement true?” question, just to see if it crashes it, obviously not but its will worth trying. And Rajava sure went insane. Even the heat death plan likely was just an excuse, or some rewriting latter for justification of something. Its gada be a whole mess. So thanks for the draft!


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