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(WIP) If you squint a little...It's actually starting to look like a thing xd
🕑 Added 2024-12-20 03:02:27 +0000 UTCAlright- told myself I would slap down an update today no matter what so here's where were at- And the change I'll be talking about here is:
A New Intro!
I really didn't want to do a narrated intro just to explain the premise -ORIGINALLY - Those types of introduction scenes can sometimes feel a little cliche, but you know what's worse than cliche? Boring-
Boring like 2 dudes talking- or worse, a dude talking to his old neighbor.. Yeah I'm glad I changed that one
After reworking a few other scenes a few things started to be clearly missing that could fit into that style of scene... Like showing Nanako (pink hair) 'at work' - To show the process of the creation of crystal magic (conceptually it's pretty similar to a lot of fantasy alchemy), and to show the dynamic a little more clearly between the male and female members of this criminal organization. It also felt like kinda a good idea to just have a lot of the themes laid out at the very start - Like women with power over men, a monolithic governing body that has power over both of them, cultural taboos, and people trying to use the systems at play to their own advantage... usually unsuccessfully
The idea that vore in this world is criminalized, yet blatantly encouraged in multiple ways is incredibly important to the story. And pretty much all of that was missing in that first draft... but the actual 'structure' of the story hasn't really changed all that much, and that's kinda the fun part for me right now- Things are starting to click and I'm slowly gaining confidence
Because not gonna lie- when I first started this I thought the beginning of this might have to suck for the rest to be any good... I don't think that's the case anymore, if it sucks that's on me
I think my immediate goal right now is just trying to move forward up until the first actually 'sexually coded' vore scene, which is just Honey ramming Nanako's roommate up her 'evidence bin' - But I think at this pace I might be able to set an overall goal of getting the entire first chapter basically finished by the end of next month-
Which I know saying that some people will unsubscribe until then but that's okay. Until this first chapter is finished I'm all talk anyways, so I want this done.
