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Outrun - Chapter 231

🕑 Added 2025-03-31 22:04:02 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

Do her perks cost anything? Does she have a mana pool that diminishes the more shadowy she is? "Whatever didn’t seem like one of the cult’s plant monsters." -> it was / did this "And its feet also suggested something else was responsible. There were plenty of them left in bloody trails" -> footprints "A couple dozen dead Crusaders lay dispersed amongst the group. Even more Squires lay scattered about" -> i think ya may wanna use another plural noun besides "crusaders" here, cuz the Squires are in the crusade. "The remaining cultists kept defensive positions as they fired away at a group of five Knights. All of them worked together" -> before ya start talking about how the battle is continuing, I think you should add a line about her noticing the fire fight as soon as she enters the room (a couple paragraphs before this quoted line). I thought she was poofed to a room with a former battle, and she was piecing together what had happened, crime scene forensics style. Might be just me tho. She describes a bunch of carnage first and it just seemed like another room of dead bodies, to me.

foo-jin

I can't help but feel that all the deaths are going to be used in a ritual of some kind, so even if all the cultists are killed it will probably still contribute. Tricky, that.


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