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Outrun - Chapter 235

🕑 Added 2025-04-09 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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lenkite

own violation -> own volition

InLucidReverie

Surprised Wolf didn't offer his approval at her treating one of his pack

InLucidReverie

> This place need a deep, deep scrub to clean up Wrong tense on need >The control room was closer to a long and wide hallway covered in screens and consoles than anything. Than anything???

Alan Lint

Well I went a few months to let the chapters build up. Think it was around the attack on that major circle with the evil crow. Was briefly hoping all this circle plot would be done so I can binge the big fight but can no longer wait. You've done a great job on this story, laying down threads that seem like it will branch through other arcs. Can't wait to see what you got in store next and how the update changes. Also a one off chapter of her speak easy just being filled with magi and their animals. Especially foxes, that shark and the wolf, would be adorable.

Lost Rain

I’ll fix those when I can. Not every door. Just, like, the bulwarks that separate ships into chunks. The ones intended to compartmentalize damage so the entire ship doesn’t flood if one section gets breached. Not the doorways into rooms. Kind of confusing?

Gardor

"There were about ten people, including me, the Inquisitor, and the Squires." -> maybe "his" Squires, so we know it's not just a general term "The shields they detached as he passed" ->shields detached "Squires to exploit with perfectly fire bursts to do maximum damage" -> fired "Darren moved for the door, waving his hand. One of the shields moved forward, slamming into the door and knocking it off its hinges. It was unlocked." -> is it not all doors that warp people? Every scene so far has sort of been self contained singular rooms, and they could only travel by cutting through walls. Tyftc


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