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Outrun - Chapter 242

🕑 Added 2025-04-25 22:04:01 +0000 UTC

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InLucidReverie

> Our group totaled forty in total 'in full' would be better

Lost Rain

Could just scrap that part to be honest. It wouldn’t make much of a difference. I was trying to point out that Shiro didn’t note down everything of the Underground she knew, instead opting to keep her knowledge on a need to know basis. This way she’d still have an advantage if she ever needed to do something Underground past the Crusade’s eyes.

Gardor

"I paused for a moment as I quickly came up with an excuse. “Yeah… well… I had to map out a massive section in a short time, so of course I skipped a few things.”  The woman shifted from foot to foot uncertainly and looked at me as if I were a loon. “What are you t-talking about?”  I laughed lightly and waved off her question. “Where do you think the map came from?” ”N-no way. You made it?” The disbelief in Siev’s voice was obvious.  ””Course! Just trust me.” I put on the best, Honest Face I could." I don't quite understand her motives for acting like this. It's not really a lie, that she made the map quickly. And it also doesn't seem like she's purposely trying to brag or be arrogant, as if she's trying to impress these people. However, she's definitely not just matter of factly telling them this information, she's aware of what it means that she shared the Intel and is trying to project something. It just doesn't seem like she should be "acting", trying to sell herself right now. Or that she should care that they know? Ligh knows she gave the map to the crusade, she knows she gave the map to the crusade, Ligh asked her for another route and she delivered. I dunno just struck me as a weird character beat. Tyftc

Gardor

Prob piercing

Scholar of Endless Knowledge

When does our mc get herself a cool fox companion 🥺

Arkus86

"At max draw, an arrow formed of silver formed as if coalescing from the air." - remove the first "formed" "He released the arrow, sending it perching up towards the roof." - I'm no expert, but "perching" does not feel like the right verb for this context.

David Brims

It's ironic: Inquisitor Ligh's powers probably work better BECAUSE he wanders around in a daze of drunken confusion and has no real idea where he's going. It gives his power a chance to step in.


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