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Outrun - Chapter 251

🕑 Added 2025-05-16 22:04:02 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

"The strike squad would clean up any POIs left over and hit the tree hard and fast, right? Could I- could I try to reroute to them? Get to safety/" ->this paragraph supposed to end here? It doesnt seem like one of those concussion jerky train of thought things.

lenkite

> I hesitated for a brief moment before pulling them off and tossing them into a trash bin That will disable her [Dexterity] perk - the very reason she wore wrist guns.

Lost Rain

Yeah, probably should've saved it. Would've been great as the finale of a different arc, probably. Live and learn though, I guess.

Lost Rain

Thank you! Its fixed.

Lost Rain

Its fixed. Thank you!

InLucidReverie

What happened to 251? Do you dislike Celebi or something? You jumped from 250 to 252

InLucidReverie

> Hopefully, that’d let me loose the hounds. Lose Also, not sure why she's calling herself ckcky for thinking she could escape when it was literally the only option available to her

Mark Robert Mitchell

“ I’m afraid I did the opposite, and it's dragging. ” Perhaps but I don’t mind. Trying to create a sense of isolation and desperation takes time. You almost have to draw it out. I suppose instead of a series of desperate events, you could go the Charles Dickens/ Dostoevsky route and described something in great/excessive detail. Both have downsides and upsides to me as a reader. (I don’t write so I can only comment on my experience as a reader.

Gardor

"Probably would've felt better if I had a rest period between the ship and the AEZ." There's was also the "hunted through the city" thing directly preceding the ship, not sure if that helps or hurts however you feel about the lack of a rest period. It almost feels like an afterthought now tho, and perhaps I'm just salty about what seemed like a climactic scene being relegated to third place. You may honestly wanna save that situation, death squads hunting her, for an arc/book that isn't so "busy". Or one that needs a big old fight sequence. Haven't read the last two chapters, looking forward to finishing the arc in one go.


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