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Outrun - Chapter 326

🕑 Added 2025-11-05 23:04:01 +0000 UTC

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Gardor

I think you should it make it more clear that the support unit were doing things before Shiro contacted them, that theyd have been moving dragonflies and trying to get access to cameras to monitor Mira before Shiro talked to them. Something like "it'll take a few 'more' minuted" for Saint to fly the dragonflies over helps.

Gardor

"No one reacted like it was perfectly normal." -> pretty important comma, "No one reacted, like it was perfectly normal."

UnderwhelmingBird

Heh, nice. Alls well that ends, uh...well, Iris got out yeah? Now's time for brother bea--wolf? wolf. Yes. Shiro and Mira are pretty much hard counters to mental magics, arent they? Mira needing to be 'conquered' 5x more than any normal person, and Shiro with supernatural mental fortitude.

kreiverin

Thanks

StSteve

Hah the content warning had me skipping to the end first to make sure it wasnt Mira before actually reading the chapter.

Jaksterzoo

Same! 100% thought Mira was about to eat lead… after putting a bad bet with her split personalities.

Hoffman

Thanks for the content warning. Though since it's mind control I'm not sure if this counts. My thoughts st least

HikinBear

It works, but might flow better with a rewrite. Mind Freak could use a better setup; the really evil ones need that. was all in Mira’s palm → was all in Mira’s plan

WindGunner

Don't fucking scare me Like that. With that Warning i thought you gonna kill Mira or iris

Jaksterzoo

Thanks for the chapter


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